两篇英语作文,大家帮帮忙

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{:6_711:}我以后不会了也找你们帮写｀

鱼大吉

鱼大,你家孩子上初中啦???  哈哈哈哈哈哈哈哈
smlie熙雅 发表于 2009-2-3 17:47

                               
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是的，我家孩子马上要考高中了，可以打酱油了。

Betty汤

5# 美人帐下跳着舞
貌似里面语法错误还挺多的...一些用词也挺有问题...

Betty汤

6# 美人帐下跳着舞 日期写在右上角，最后的yours加逗号，和鱼大要分两行...

鱼大吉

貌似Betty汤英语很好，帮忙写一篇啦。

美人帐下跳着舞

15# Betty汤

呵呵，这个不是我写的，只是受某人之托，用来抛砖引玉。
你这么强，很多“语法错误和用词不当”的文章当然入不了你的法眼，你帮着写一篇又何妨。让我们也来看看“没有语法错误，没有用词不当”的文章到底是什么样的。

鱼大吉

楼上的,辛苦了,哈哈.

鱼宝宝

Betty汤

The first day of the spring festival  this year is as normal as before. In the early morning, my mother and I went to the temple for worship. It was so many people that we couldn't move quickly.I even couldn't breath because of the smell in it. After that, we had a dinner  in the temple. It was full of vegetables instead of meat. My mother told me that the food of the temple could clean our bodies.I wondered whether it could help or not. Four hours later, we left to the supermarket and bought some food. Finally, we went home and I felt too tired to move . So I think next year I won't go out with my mother anymore.
这是我前年的痛苦经历...可能还存在着问题，部分词语不太会用。